The end of interest

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I'm simple this way

this way leaning

 

Watching your want

this way fading.

 

You're always his way

his way gleaning.

 

I'm holding this loss

this way leaving.

 

 

When you leave

the conversation

before you've left

the company-

 

when I've left

your busy thoughts

after I've left

your sympathy-

 

with your touch

and cooling look

and your grasp

I try to bind

 

is like tying with

a broken chord

a memory

of a kind-

 

Words and image  Tommy Carroll

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 28th Jun 2019 15:55

El Pintor a praise to be sure. Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 23rd Jun 2019 03:08

Devon: once again I have to think. ?

Rachel: high praise indeed. Tommy

elPintor

Wed 19th Jun 2019 09:13

A fine piece of writing--really a rarity.

Rachel

Devon Brock

Wed 19th Jun 2019 00:13

I just read this aloud while the wife was in the bath. Man oh man oh man. Leaving me without an end rhyme to go with "behind", sheer lump in throat stuff. Keep coming back to this, over and over.

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 18th Jun 2019 23:06

Devon, Cheers and appreciated. Tommy

Lisa, short and...to the point lol Tommy

Martin, thanks for your words and the view is accross Liverpool Bay from the Wirral/Harrison Drive. Tommy

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Martin Elder

Tue 18th Jun 2019 22:31

Fabulous poem Tommy with a great rhythm. just wondering where the picture is. Could be somewhere like Southport or Formby. Either way it is a beautiful shot
Nice one mate

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Lisa C Bassignani

Tue 18th Jun 2019 22:17

goodbye

Devon Brock

Tue 18th Jun 2019 21:20

Really digging on the terse verses here, Tommy. Also, the rhythmic razmataz after "This way leaving" is top notch.

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