Haiku X 10

(Right, never tried Haiku before so here's some I wrote today, hope they're ok)

 

(Soul)

A wandering soul,

Tortured by experience,

Finds peace in your arms.

 

(Compass)

A broken compass,

Knows not the way to true north,

But may yet find it.

 

(Tears)

Tears of happiness,

​​​​​​Taste exactly as salty,

​​​​​​As tears of sorrow.

 

​(Student)

​​​​​​The way of students,

​​​​​​Is conveyed by the master,

​​​​​​But followed by both.

 

​​​​​​(Feather)

​​​​​​The drifting feather,

​​​​​​Swoops gently on a soft wind,

​​​​​​But still falls to earth.

 

​​​​​​(Harsh Words)

​​​​​​Sometimes a harsh word,

​​​​​​Is a kindness in disguise,

​​​​​​And sometimes it's not.

 

​​​​​(Bones)

​​​​​​Bones broke in combat,

​​​​​​And bitter cuts of battle,

​​​​​​Must be healed by peace.

 

​​​​​​(Eagle)

​​​​​​The swooping eagle,

​​​​​​Sees and knows, only its prey,

​​​​​​And forgets its flight.

 

​​​​​​(Mist)

​​​​​​Early morning mist,

​​​​​​Nourishes the tall barley,

​​​​​​And melts in the Sun.

 

​​​​​​(Heart)

​​​​​​The tenderest heart,

​​​​​​Beats within the bravest breast,

​​​​​​And loves fearlessly.

 

 

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 18th Jun 2019 11:01

Thank you Lisa, I'm touched that you were touched by it, and thank you to all who liked, considering it was my first go I'm pleased with how they came out.💕

J. x

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Lisa C Bassignani

Tue 18th Jun 2019 02:08

Jason, 'Tears' filled me with tears! Love it. All are quite wonderful

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 17th Jun 2019 13:56

Thanks Martin, that is high praise indeed. I did surprise myself with how much I enjoyed doing them though.😀

J.

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Martin Elder

Mon 17th Jun 2019 09:25

Wow Jason. Not just one but a veritable flotilla of Haiku's. they almost read like something from the book of proverbs or perhaps eastern philosophy. Excellent mate
Love it

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 16th Jun 2019 21:41

Thank you so much Jennifer and Fish for your kind comments and thanks to everyone that's liked, it's really, really appreciated.

J. x

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afishamongmany

Sun 16th Jun 2019 21:23

Jason - You've hatched a top rate batch of Haiku. Remarkable good, especially as they are your first ever brood. A pleasure to read. ><>

jennifer Malden

Sun 16th Jun 2019 16:27

Lovely Jason! Agree with Mona, but especially liked Compass, Tears and Harsh Words. You are really talented.

Jennifer

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 15th Jun 2019 22:46

Thanks Devon, very much appreciated, I've never done one before but once I got the 5, 7, 5, syllabic beat and the central cutting statement I could hardly stop. Really enjoyed myself with this.

J.😀

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Devon Brock

Sat 15th Jun 2019 21:00

You clearly understand both the spirit and difficulty (yet you do it with seeming ease) of haiku. My faves: "Compass", "Student", "Feather", "Eagle" and "Mist".

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 15th Jun 2019 20:17

Thank you both so much, funny Julia, those were my favourites too. I think I quite like Haiku's.

J. x

mona s

Sat 15th Jun 2019 19:26

Skilfully written.. Each one a gem.. Brilliant Jason.

Julia G

Sat 15th Jun 2019 19:13

Tears and Heart; my favourites! X

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