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windy day

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The wind’s busy today.

It bustles and hurries

flipping bin lids

as it goes.

 

The wind’s forgetful today.

It rushes past me,

can’t remember where it’s going,

turns back

and rushes past me

again.

 

The wind’s playful today.

Stripping the leaves off the trees

to leave them naked.

 

The wind’s chatty today

laughing and giggling

it raises my skirt

as it swirls by.

 

The wind’s spiteful today

getting chilly and boisterous

making me wish

I’d put my scarf and gloves on.

 

The wind’s grumpy today.

It moans and whistles

hums and screeches.

It has a lot to say.

 

Before it blows away.

 

photo Leeni

 

 

 

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 1st Mar 2010 11:41

Much better,I think.
There is a huge market for children's poetry, ie. poetry for children. You should investigate this. You have a real talent for the beautifully simple, and the simply beautiful.

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Isobel

Sun 28th Feb 2010 20:29

Yes - I like the idea too and the fun element to the poem. You should spend a few days up in the North West - you'd have enough verses to satisfy Graham, by the end of your stay...

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 28th Feb 2010 17:40

Have added a couple of verses

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 28th Feb 2010 16:50

This is so good - once again. I was very attentive to one of your discussion comments, about how you write. This mixture of childlike wonder and mature imaging is very attractive.

Perhaps the idea of 'chatty' is not contained in the next few lines, which use 'strong' verbs. So, the poem could be extended very easily to expand and correct this conflicting idea.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 28th Feb 2010 13:40

You can have too much of a good thing! ;-) (haha)

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 28th Feb 2010 12:35

What a great idea this is, the changeable wind. I think there are more verses required here Ann foxglove?

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Francine

Sat 27th Feb 2010 19:50

This is adorable... Love the photo too!

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