tanka for the nemophilia

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spring defies winter 

 

ibaraki's acid bruise 

 

piercing litmus noise 

 

detune freezing radio 

 

submission to fleeting hope 

◄ even though it's all switched off, a constant hum

Amoebius (For National Poetry Day) ►

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steve black

Wed 20th Mar 2019 12:57

I found the following advice helpful with regards to syllable counting and definitions of tanka.

Just Google

temps libres - haiku writing rules : Counting syllables

Problem of Tanka - Atlas Poetica

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raypool

Tue 19th Mar 2019 19:28

I envy your dictionary mind Stu. A vast palette to draw from, and the result is a fascination that gives us hope for creativity.

Ray

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 19th Mar 2019 14:35

So do I Stu. An excellent effort.

For those who don't know, this form is 5 -7 -5- 7- 7- with reference to nature, feelings and with a twist or a question in the last line.

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Stu Buck

Tue 19th Mar 2019 14:35

i'm nothing if not a rule breaker graham!

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 19th Mar 2019 14:24

Stu you've got me going now (work in progress) but shouldn't Tanka be in the first person?

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Stu Buck

Tue 19th Mar 2019 12:34

thanks both. i love the japanese short forms rachel, they impress a real boundary on the words you use but don't limit the imagination.

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elPintor

Tue 19th Mar 2019 06:00

I'm quite fond of these brief forms that embody such vastness--I must study more.

Rachel

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Daniel King

Mon 18th Mar 2019 17:32

I am a moth to flames.

March comes in like a tiger and leaves like a lamb.

To measure the impact of pressure and the radius of the bruise.

I submit my hopelessness to the gallow's of verdict.

Baby's got blue eyes when the morning comes...

https://youtu.be/4CiyKeSnSxk

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