Redemption

Redemption, like water through your fingers,

A coil of mist beyond your grasp,

Almost within reach, but no whisp lingers,

No droplet held within your clasp.

 

No arbiter or judge except your endless soul,

No sign of the divine expresses,

The hole which leaves you unwhole,

Filled with the unholy that so wholly possesses.

 

That which can only be gifted, never taken,

That which you must give first in order to receive,

That which requires the unshaking will of the shaken,

To embrace grace and finally believe.

 

Forgiveness is the first step of that road,

And with each footfall steadily release,

Your grip on the burdens of your own bitter load,

And there, honest and naked, seek redemptive peace.

◄ A Stone For The Miller

As You Walk The Road ►

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<Deleted User> (21487)

Sat 30th Mar 2019 16:44

Jason
this is a powerful, haunting poem that grips from beginning to end,
I can't pick out a favourite line, each word on each line is perfection.
Thank you for this Jason.

Dorothy

steven arthur

Sat 30th Mar 2019 14:37

best rhymer left on the site. so good.

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Mae Foreman

Fri 22nd Mar 2019 10:35


"That which can only be gifted, never taken,

That which you must give first in order to receive,

That which requires the unshaking will of the shaken,

To embrace grace and finally believe."

Sometimes forgiving ourselves is harder than being forgiven by others...

And that's why we need to redeem ourselves, otherwise apologizing would be just fine!

"Your grip on the burdens of your own bitter load,

And there, honest and naked, seek redemptive peace."

Wonderful Jason! Loved it! ?
Mae

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Heart of Lead

Sun 17th Mar 2019 20:07

The need for forgiveness is so strong. If we were ruled by love and forgiveness, we would have no need for law. But indeed, to love and forgive can never be enforced. Your words are so powerful and much needed to hear. I am on that journey as well. Your words are deeply needed and I cherish them. Thank you for sharing.

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 17th Mar 2019 18:38

Thanks Martin, I seem to be having a spate of trying to write about fairly big themes at the moment, but you can only go with the thoughts as they hit you. Genuine thanks to those that liked and commented.

J. x

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Martin Elder

Sun 17th Mar 2019 18:08

This is a beautiful piece Jason. I love the line a coil of mist beyond your grasp.

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