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The Grandeur of Her Reign

Oh, solicitous moon

You remain balanced on

the very edge of the

early morning sky, careful

to hold on only

long enough

to make sure the shy sun

has risen.  When she

is basking in the grandeur

of her reign, you

slip quietly away

so her unwitting disciples can

adore her golden perfection

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Boa Lee

Tue 19th Feb 2019 01:39

Thanks for the suggestions and encouragement. Still a work in progress.

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raypool

Sun 17th Feb 2019 21:59

Hello NPaub Lis. Forgive me but I was so captivated by this that I found myself wanting to suggest a tiny alteration - only if you agree of course. Substitute "it remains balanced" for "you remain balanced", and again " you slip quietly away" instead of "it slips quietly away". For me that would make the moon more personal.

All the best Ray

<Deleted User> (19913)

Sun 17th Feb 2019 20:44

A beautiful and unique observation of sunrise and moon setting

<Deleted User> (21487)

Sun 17th Feb 2019 20:23

Calm, gentle and beautiful
Thank you

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