delicate boys
and intricate poisons
coax solemn oaths
from intimate whispers
like prayers to nameless loneliness
and longing
but jealous daylight
still grips her knife
in wait to kill
what she cannot take
from night
though all that was
once wild in us
is now retreating
elPintor
Sun 17th Feb 2019 14:36
Cheers, Ray and Kate--lovely to hear from you!
<Deleted User> (19913)
Sun 17th Feb 2019 06:01
So many delicious wild moments and secrets are cloaked in darkness. Beautiful metaphor Rachel.
I love the contrast between the hints and whispers of the first stanza and the starkness of the strike of the second Rachel. I feel it is in a way a harder version of my own Valentine in a sense being a sort of retribution poem. (Thanks for your comment, i'll be back to that later). It's right that there should be a price to pay in the balance of male and female. IMO. When I read of untapped sources of passion I often think of the female spider, wow!
Delightful. Ray
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elPintor
Mon 18th Feb 2019 10:11
Thanks, all, for reading.