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TODAY

Today
could be that day,
the last day to be awake,
not woken,
to have dreamt,
in dreams, mostly remembered ,
and speak in words, mumbled,
not spoken.

Today
could be that day,
the last day
to live a life alone
to eat a meal
in burnt abandon
and drink
a drunken drink at home.

Today
could be the day,
the last to smell
the second-hand smoke
and watch the dripping,
setting sun,
with no one but,
the strangest folk.

Today
could be that day,
the last to fall
from deep asleep,
in slumber
from this darkened path,
no kiss goodnight,
no tears to weep.

Today
could be that day,
the last day,
not knowing.

◄ TO CHOOSE

SUNRISE ►

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Ciaran Cunningham

Wed 5th Dec 2018 15:43

Thanks Kate G, Douglas & raypool. I do use repetition quite a bit, hopefully in a positive way ?

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Wed 5th Dec 2018 12:04

Well if it's my last day, I'm very glad to have read your poem!

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Douglas MacGowan

Tue 4th Dec 2018 17:15

Multi-faceted. I agree with Ray that the repetition of the first two lines is a strong technique in the piece.

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raypool

Tue 4th Dec 2018 15:51

Just checked in Cieran following your comment on Auburn Hair. Your technique really makes for poetic form and satisfaction, repeating first lines to take us at a lovely pace through the muse .
This is something I fear I may poach in the future, having seen it in action!

The very best . Ray

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