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What I Share With A Screaming Toddler.

I was shopping with my wife the other day.

She's trying on lots of clothes in lots of different shops, not really looking convinced by anything.

It's getting hard to pretend that I'm interested,

when I spy a young lady with her toddler

and the toddler is screaming.

It was then that I had a moment of clarity, in amongst the tears and tantrum.

I am that child and I completely understand what he is going through.

I feel what he feels.

I am frustrated as he is frustrated

I am in pain as he is in pain.

The only difference is, that as I've grown older I've learned to articulate myself better.

I've learned to articulate myself better

I've learned to articulate myself better

I've learned to aticulate myself better.

She knows how I feel.

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◄ Lots of Thoughts to Think About, but Probably Not. I'm Tired, Not Deep.

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clarissa mckone

Tue 19th Jan 2010 04:59

yep, real life poem, very nice.

Pete Crompton

Sun 17th Jan 2010 12:51

love the new style, direct and honest observations enable us all to get stuck into the words, monologue and poem fused, a performance slant, the reiteration sounds louder line by line, keep tapping into these themes Chris

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Francine

Sun 17th Jan 2010 03:17

This is funny... Many men I think feel this pain ; )

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Isobel

Sat 16th Jan 2010 19:04

I like this one too. Not sure that many men know how to articulate the important things - but that's maybe a jaundiced view. Like your new style Star Garter.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 16th Jan 2010 13:39

This is good. Which 'she' is it - the wife or the child's mother?

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neil gardiner

Sat 16th Jan 2010 10:24

Hey Star. Get a hat from the big hat shop in York. I think it would suit you. I like the poem about the Screaming Toddler it reminds me of when my kiddies were small.
Keep safe, Neil

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winston plowes

Sat 16th Jan 2010 00:21

Hi Star Garter...
If i read this right the three repeated lines at the end each increase in volume (as a todler might be screaming). A nice idea and one that works in the context of the poem . If this site would allow maybe it could be posted up in an increasing size font each line? Win

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