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STAR STRUCK

Everything is Everything!

We're the stuff of stars...
Planet & seas.

Now I've planted the seeds...
To open up this can of peas.

Have no fear.

We're under canopies of atmosphere.

So, our atoms have eaves...
On this Atlas, here.

Humanity or manatee.

Still, I feel out of place...
Out of time & out of space.

Wanna pick a place in outer space.

Figure out a route...
And mount a chase.

Yeah, I'm well rounded...
And gounded by counterweights.

But after being sun-weathered...
To be untethered?

That, I'm down to face.

◄ REAL ESTATE OF MIND

MIDLIFE ►

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Eric James

Tue 9th Oct 2018 06:35

Hey Big Sal, I checked out Atmosphere on YouTube. I see what you mean about us having a similar rhyme style. I'm flattered to be compared to them and their dope lyrics!

Big Sal

Mon 8th Oct 2018 13:14

Have you ever listened to Atmosphere? A rap group from Minnesota, US?

Man, they're fucking legendary, and your piece reminded me of them. Great job, you have that eye for poetry and rhymes that you can manipulate the words to do your bidding. Not many people can do that with rhyme, and thanks for your own comments on my work - it is very much appreciated.?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 8th Oct 2018 06:32

I liked this poem..especially when read out loud. Your poems are very lyrical..thank you..?

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