Sweet sorrowful sparrow

I’m a poet, a dreamer, a non believer, the girl who’s always smiling, belly full of laughter, sweetness by nature, but at the same time a total disaster, the heart broken heart breaker.

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 16:25

Ok, on one hand I see what they mean, I'm dyslexic and it's a bit harder to read like this, on the other hand, if this is the style you prefer then of course you should stick with it.
Although to be fair, I don't think anyone was suggesting you change, just voicing a preference.
Either way, loved it.

J. x

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Myescape

Fri 21st Sep 2018 19:53

I do not understand what the two of you mean seeing as this is easy for me to read. I will continue with the way I write tho -shrug-

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Don Matthews

Fri 15th Jun 2018 15:53

I feel the same as Brian Myescape. It's hard taking in the separate thoughts when you run it all together like this. Try splitting it into several lines.

Don ?

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Brian Maryon

Thu 14th Jun 2018 07:22

I like it, but as a traditionalist I would prefer to see it set out in lines.

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