Sweet sorrowful sparrow

I’m a poet, a dreamer, a non believer, the girl who’s always smiling, belly full of laughter, sweetness by nature, but at the same time a total disaster, the heart broken heart breaker.

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Don Matthews

Fri 15th Jun 2018 15:53

I feel the same as Brian Myescape. It's hard taking in the separate thoughts when you run it all together like this. Try splitting it into several lines.

Don 😎

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Brian Maryon

Thu 14th Jun 2018 07:22

I like it, but as a traditionalist I would prefer to see it set out in lines.

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