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Addiction to Deal

What has this world come to?

What has my world come to?

 

Everyday I drown my sorrows with booze, sex....anything I can

I’m trapped inside my head

 

Images of what was, and what could be

...flash before my eyes so vividly

like I’m there

 

But I’m here...why can’t I live here

Why can’t I be happy here, I’m certainly not happy there

 

I’m drowning...

I’m dying, the pain is killing me

In this beautifully miserable life

 

I drink so much to kill the thoughts,

the agony, my misery

the what if’s, the what can be’s

 

I hate everything now

◄ Bright Eyes Dead

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Megan Pieroway

Thu 14th Jun 2018 13:17

Big Sal, thank you very much for the wonderful constructive criticism! I really do appriciate it! And it’s one of the reasons why I choose to post on this site! I will gladly hear any advice/cc from anyone! ?

Thank you!

Big Sal

Thu 14th Jun 2018 01:55

No problem, and each of the poems you have posted so far have such substance that it feels like more elaboration can not only improve an already great piece of art, but also bring it to a level that would require a bit of deciphering and more re-reads. Don't get me wrong, they're already great to read, but improving should not be relegated to only when we feel inadequate as writers, but also when a great piece can be made even better. If you feel they are good as is, then well so do I?. A good read is a good read, but a great one will never hurt.?

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Megan Pieroway

Wed 13th Jun 2018 23:48

Hey Big Sal, I really appriciate that, what do you mean by wanting to hear more! Any advice is greatly appreciated!

Thanks again!

Big Sal

Wed 13th Jun 2018 05:09

So far I like the titles you have for your pieces here, and the poems themselves leave the reader wanting to hear more. Enjoyed this one as well.?

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