Descending panting from the top
(where god is always in the lower case)
The wind bleached lichen
gives way to greener stuff.
We re-assert a modicum of breathless grace
and skirt the bog (why is such a vastness called a 'mere'?)
much as we skirt the subject
never managing to reach the nub of it.
At the bridge we part
before all our alibis expire.
In your face the rumour of a tear
and I am just a hank of wool
left fluttering on your barbed wire.
Jx
Only just found this ... beautiful.
Cx
I don't seem to have commented on this one though I remember it. (Must have been doing something on Nov 20th 2009 I guess!) I really love it. Better late than never eh! xx
Lovely stuff this,it had me laughing , (why is such a vastness called a 'mere') and then seconds later gasping in sadness. I really felt it. I also love the imagery, it had me right up on Beacon Fell. Thanks for the emotional work out.
Cheers
Rachel
x
No - you haven't John. You have to edit the poem and stick WOLOP.nov in the tag bit at the bottom, then press update. Hopefully that will work. Cheers.x
Aaaah, I think I've done it. Many thanks to Admin Paul.
: )
Jx
I'd love to tag it...but I don't know how...being a fusty old fuddy duddy 'n all. What does it entail?
: )
Jx
John, darling. if I may use that word - tee hee - could you please tag this poem with WOLOP.nov so that people may read it as part of a group. It was nominated as a favourite poem in the informal competition that I run. Thanks.
thank you for something good.
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Wed 25th Nov 2009 10:19
Read this a couple of times before the penny fully dropped ;-) It is a subtle poem. I wonder how many of us have crossed that bridge at some point ??.
May the orange primate store this one well ;-) .
TC
Hi John.
Thoroughly enjoyed and admired this. Carefully observed and skilfully expressed. " Larkinish," - and I hope you'll take that as a compliment.Regards,A.E.
Wonderful piece, John. Memories of expiring alibis, and god-endowed climbs and descents, lend a true poignancy to it for me.
great, I enjoyed this. Jane
Hi again John.. on reflecition, better then Nicely put. Really liked this one, gets better on every reading for me. winston
Beautifully understated - I like the way it leaves the reader to fill in the gaps and fill out the pictures, giving us just enough to go on.
That's poetry. Lovely stuuf!
Thanks
John
Nicely put John. Winston
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Fkx
Mon 7th Feb 2011 13:16
That image just stays with me... the wool, snagged and fluttering from that barbed wire. That brought a volume and intensity to the poem. TFS.