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invictus

..reciting the silent

rites of another evensong

 

and ritual slaughter

of gore, once again, placed

upon the open altar--

 

when heart murmurs

slip into the realpolitik

of the over-publicized

 

the bottle will defend

their lonely deaths

 

and guard their tombs

against night's lucid terrors

 

to save them for next

morning's resurrection.

◄ ripple (limits of human perception)

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elPintor

Sat 8th Jul 2017 01:40

Good heavens, it's Friday and I'm so glad to have the evening to kick back and enjoy...

Hi, Becky..thanks a great much. I've truly been enjoying your writing lately, also, and I hope to keep reading more from you.

And you, Stu..I hoped you would like the NCase video. I've almost adored her for years and wanted to pass that along to you.

Hey, Ray..I wouldn't think about it too much, fella..I know I didn't. And the bottle? I realize that it probably starts more conflicts than it ends.

Dear David, I don't want to contradict myself (as many of us are so predisposed to do) but alcohol does have medicinal properties. I use it to calm a generally unruly mind and for sleeplessness and its associated symptoms. Anyhow, never waste your effort cursing yourself for they'll always be someone to take up your slack where you come up short.

What's up, Mr. Spangles? This started as a piece dedicated to a heart worn too openly. So, that verse is my personal favorite even though the rest of the piece seemed to take another direction. I'm glad you picked up on it, dear sir.


Thanks to all for reading,

elP (that's me, Rachel)

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suki spangles

Fri 7th Jul 2017 23:16

Hi Rachel,

I especially enjoyed the scalpel-like:

when heart murmurs
slip into the realpolitik
of the over-publicized..

Too true..

Suki

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raypool

Wed 5th Jul 2017 21:36

Powerful imagery with lots of food for thought - the bottle assumes a way out of unavoidable conflicts.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Wed 5th Jul 2017 13:49

excellent as usual! each line has no excess fat and the sparsity works, as it so often does.

also, thanks for the links. i enjoyed them, havent heard that neko case song before and as for slow-mo owls - well how could one not enjoy that!

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Becky Sowray

Wed 5th Jul 2017 09:30

great, sudden slabs of image that land accurately, lovely protest at slices of the human condition

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