I see you
left forsaken
in the desert
along the footsteps
to the threshold
of your own home..
to spare you
the kiss of pity
upon your cheek
I would send before you
great trembling and thunder
to awaken all that sleep
within your house
while you still walk
the earth athirst...
Hi there elP,
This reminds me so much of the poetry of Brian Turner - similar theme(s) too.
Excellent.
Suki
elPintor
Fri 30th Jun 2017 23:46
Hey, David,
I would rather have upset a particular few other than you. Few? Well, they are far more than they should be--those who are a little too comfortable in their skin with delusions of shelter from all the shit storms they start, I mean.
My apologies before I go any further. You probably have no idea what goes through my mind and I don't dare tell.
Anyhow, your comment has me thinking. It's something that comes to mind quite often, in fact. Somehow, I don't believe that there's a way back after marginalization. I mean, we might be able to flirt with the line a bit. But, in many ways, might always be relegated to the other side.
I hope I'm making some kind of sense, here. There's some territory into which I don't venture often because of the emotion it stirs. But, you seem quite intelligent enough to understand, anyhow.
I hope you are well, David. Take good care and I hope that you don't encounter too many volatile situations as you travel through this world.
elP xx
ps
..not really trying to be funny, but those "potentially hazardous to your health" warnings are most likely on file and backed up to infinity.
https://www.archives.gov/st-louis/military-personnel/fire-1973.html
--we can never return to such simple times...
elPintor
Thu 29th Jun 2017 23:36
By the way, thanks for reading, Rich and Colin.
elP x
elPintor
Thu 29th Jun 2017 23:32
Hey, Ray..what's up?
Thanks for commenting. I certainly don't feel that this piece is my best as far as level of creativity goes, but I couldn't refrain from expressing something of how I feel. Truthfully, I get too disgusted to talk about it rationally.
However, if you want a peek at part of the thought process behind this, watch some clips on Youtube about Major General Smedley Butler. There are too many good ones to mention. But, to preface, he was an extraordinary character who foiled a fascist plot against FDR that was cooked up by huge corporate interests right here in the US. His story is unforgettable and he makes some quite intelligent commentary on the nature of war and how soldiers are abused and misused.
Take care, Ray,
elP
ps
..or, if you're interested, take a watch at Eisenhower's departure speech from the Presidency--an absolutely chilling warning about the times we inhabit.
This resonates with the lonely footfall and the trudging of time . It has a sort of religious feel, especially with the desert and its wilderness. I think the soldier doesn't want pity just recognition and that comes across.
Powerful stuff elP.
Ray
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elPintor
Mon 3rd Jul 2017 03:44
Good to hear from you, Suki. I must admit that I should do some reading on Brian Turner (in the midst of it at this very moment, in fact).
I did get the opportunity to hear this very recently on NPR--
https://themoth.org/stories/war
--a journalist's story told live.
Very glad for the opportunity to share--thanks, Suki.
elP