butterflies, where are they?
They should be there when I know I am seeing you.
They should be there when I hear you knock on my door.
They should be there when you kiss me hello.
They should be there when you hold my hand.
They should be there when our clothes fall to the floor.
They should be there but they aren't....
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 2nd Jun 2017 08:26
I love this Maxine, makes me think the analogy could be taken in all sorts of different directions - you have my mind in meltdown with ideas, all of which are as fleeting as a passing butterfly in late summer.
one teensy critique - would the last line be more powerful or read better with the insertion of a but - not the twerking Kim Kardashian type or the big green water vessel in yer back yard, just a common or garden but:
They should be there but they aren't....
or even: They should be there but they're not....
Just a thought. All the best and thanks for posting.
Col