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As if to care

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Was I now the only

one on the beach?

She had stood behind me

and I had waited

for a spoken conclusion.

But without words  

the  sound that

the soft tread of her

departure made

on the sand had

told me of her decision.

 

Sunsets care nothing for    

lengthening  shadows

nor waves

that they must lap and fill

the printed pools left by feet.

 

How hard not to

turn and look

at the woman that pulled

all towards her;

those that enjoyed

her gaze;

that enjoyed her thinking;

-when to listen 

-when to care.

 

Words and foto T Carroll 

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raypool

Thu 25th May 2017 20:42

I like this a lot Tommy. It has a sad lyrical quality that can't fail to stir the emotions. Brings back some quite negative feelings of my own from the jealous past. I feel as though she is soaking up praise somehow.

Nice. Ray

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Thu 25th May 2017 08:43

beautiful writing Tommy - absolutely adore the sunsets verse. Thanks for posting. Those five lines will get repeated in my head many times today.
Col

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