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The first time
you put your hands on me,
you said it was out of love.
the second time
you said it was because
i upset you.
the last time
you tried to touch me
i walked away
and i have never looked back
because you do not
deserve me.
Comments
Frances Macaulay Forde
Wed 29th Mar 2017 02:22
Yes, I agree, very strong yet so simple, cleverly adhering to the 'rule of three' when story-telling.
Well done.
<Deleted User> (16099)
Tue 28th Mar 2017 19:43
this is very strong.recognizing the layers in a relationship and then defining them.what you describe him in the end he was just a scab you soon to be healed .. him to simply fall away.
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Raj Ferds
Wed 29th Mar 2017 05:18
Simply put and precise.
I love the stratas leading to sheer emotional and intellectual truth.
Nice rhythm too Maria.
Raj