The someonewhowhat questionmark in me
Was wonderthinking whenwherewhy she be
And journey making gypsy like to go
Out looking, the answer for to know
She took a stephopleap and turned around
A circlespiralled dreaming silenced sound
With tambourine she danced o'er sandy bay
And found anew her home and pilgrim's way
Love the clever way you've sandwiched the words Hazel.
Distinctively different and certainly engaging!
Raj
I really like the composite wordings in this piece Hazel. Very original and cleverly balanced syllables too.
A really creative poem Hazel. I like it very much, there is something about the original style that compelled me to keep reading it over and over.
Well done.
Paul
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 14th Mar 2017 20:23
ditto the previous comments already offered Hazel.
just as a side thought, I was wondering how this would work simply titled Nodding to Dylan(s) and incorporating elements of both of their work or styles - but then again it might be a task too far and guaranteed for sleepless nights!
all the best
Colin