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The End of the Affair

I had a dream I met you after slumbering in some red field.

My eyes were ripe with hurt. For your smile fell heavy on my shoulder,

thick with piety and diseased with grief, stretching out

over white crosses - the bugles in the barbed wire.  And boys

who bit suicide, and dragged their corpses in their head,

skipping the scythe in white heat, trembled  on the cheek

I kissed. Somme  long  time ago.

Your eyes, bruised by hell, were a sullen canal and slurred

Patriot terms of friendship,  and when your hand begged to stop and shook

the air for help,  it rained blood and I choked under your shattered chest,

beating the sky for its death.

 

We can't sleep now, was all you said

and I saw that I was alone.

◄ To Be

Wife ►

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winston plowes

Sat 3rd Oct 2009 15:36

Hi Marianne,
Well to be fair John Darwin pointed me towards this one (I had missed it whilst on hols). Last year I watched a manga film called Elfin Leid. I had never seen anything like this. It was shocking / graphic / bloody and disturbing and affected me a great deal. I found it hard to believe such a strong impression was made by essentially, a cartoon. Now, your poem here has done the same with simply words... stunned. Win

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John Darwin

Thu 1st Oct 2009 12:59

Fuck, this is wonderful. Are you from another planet?

thanks
John

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 25th Sep 2009 13:48

Hi Marianne,

This is a very clever montage of imagery and raw emotions - hung on barbed wire. I admire the way you are able to convey that imagery to the reader almost subliminally.

Regards,
A.E.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 23rd Sep 2009 16:16

Excellent - ideas strung together with brilliant imagery, and joined coherently enough to follow like heartbeats to a climax.

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