Insomnia
turn and turn again
spiral down deep
beneath the earth's
dark musty sheet
plough the frigid soil in vain
for space to plant
the root of sleep
Comments
Travis Brow
Wed 8th Mar 2017 07:40
This is the dog's bollocks Paul. You've nailed it in seven lines. Ace.
Thanks elP, for your kind words and for the link to a very interesting article. I taught about the psychological aspects of sleep for years but have as much fascination for the physical/biological aspects, too. I think it is an area that we may still know relatively little about.
Thanks, too, David, for a lovely compliment, very much appreciated.
Paul
A powerful extended metaphor, Paul. Brilliant, resonant short poem. This is great work
Dave R
elPintor
Sun 5th Mar 2017 00:46
Insomnia is a real monster. I agree with John about the quality of the metaphors..like a terrible fruitless wrestling.
You might find this interesting to go along with the idea that sleep is required for renewal...
http://www.bbc.com/news/health-24567412
elP
Thank you so much John, for your kind and generous praise of this short poem. I can relate to the horrors of lying awake and how the brain can torment us with dark thoughts.
Thank you, too, Ray, lovely words, much appreciated, and so glad that you 'dug' this ?
Paul
Nicely turned Paul. You are enjoying the creative form and it reveals different levels of thinking. It's interesting to see how the fallow years have not been wasted (another soil idea).
Ray
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Paul Waring
Wed 8th Mar 2017 15:42
Thanks so much Travis, very kind of you. I particularly loved the DB's part of your comment!
Best wishes,
Paul