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a glimpse through the side door of paradise

I was a fatality waiting to happen

unable to resist the temptation

of getting too close to the flames 


I walked blindly into the path

of fast movers on love's freeway


you found me

a twisted wreck of torn limbs

and breathed life into my broken soul


your bodhisattva healed 

my haemorrhaging heart

and re-tuned it 

extracting sweet notes from its core

like a stradivarius


you were Eros

lifting me so high on glittering wings

I plucked stars like apples from the sky


and gorged insatiably until I craved 

your fruits so intensely

that the fire of need 

killed our passion


leaving the corpse of love 

swelled and spent after 

another glimpse through 

the side door of paradise

 

 

 

 

 

◄ Breaking Bread With The Dead

Mrs Fox ►

Comments

Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 04:09

As a fan, I noted your reference to Steeleye Dan. Not too long ago, with Ken's permission, I happened to record his performance at a Poetry and music night here in Perth.
Enjoy.

140512 MondaySupperClub - Ken Nicol : 'Stratford':
https://youtu.be/ZO3tvd7HLWs

140512 MondaySupperClub Ken Nicol - "Initial Variations":
https://youtu.be/k6b3THztBwk

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Paul Waring

Wed 22nd Feb 2017 17:58

Thanks so much Frances and Colin, wonderful comments and I'm so grateful to you both. Steely Dan, loved them for 40+ years, this poem was partly inspired by the track!
Sorry short reply, internet problems here...

<Deleted User> (13762)

Wed 22nd Feb 2017 09:01

this feels like a follow up to The Heart of the Matter if not a connection of themes or continuation of thoughts. I would definitely echo Frances' comments but with the addition that you have written a damn fine piece of poetry Paul.

I haven't heard 'bodhisattva' since I last played Countdown to Ecstasy by Steely Dan. Not the best quality vid but genius live performance:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WqvjrEyIvP4

Col

Frances Macaulay Forde

Wed 22nd Feb 2017 02:45

Wow, Paul - love this!
Great metaphors.
You stuck with the premise and explored it with imagination and consideration of the senses; visual, audio and tactile.
Very well done.
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