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temporary quarter

winds sweep the plains

 

dusting earth's

never-fallowed ground

 

while starlings
 

like schools of fish

swimming the currents

 

shadow the light that lands

on once verdant fields...

 

beasts of burden and

human livestock press on

 

to pay the toll due the

modern robber baron

 

who hides protected

behind his broken shield--

 

a nation's economy, capital

its corporate empire and yield.

◄ reconquistadora

..to make something beautiful ►

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elPintor

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 23:49

..love Neil Young in his Crazy Horse days. Thanks for the link. It will make for good listening tonight.

elP x

elPintor

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 23:11

Thanks, Randall and Stu. When I started this, I was listening to Zeppelin, "No Quarter". But, when it was all said and done, I was listening to this...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RrxePKps87k

I can't say exactly what that has to do with the piece, but I can't seem to get enough.

elP

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Stu Buck

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 16:47

its wonderfully topical and pointed but what i enjoy most about this is the imagery and the clever way you have used language to leave the overarching message in limbo, until it comes exploding out during the last lines. excellent as ever, the line-breaks before and after 'while starlings' are an excellent use of space.

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Randall Eckstein

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 12:17

Post-apocalyptic and hauntingly relevant. This poem holds a lot in a few lines. It really paints a vivid picture of where we are and what's coming. ?

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