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Loan Shark

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Called you at midnight

you answered with no little reluctance

through the rusted ribcage of totalled phonebox,

saw the rusted renown of my smashed reason.

After one minute the receiver fades to fuzz,

my fists hammer walls that are not there,

I zip, buckle, put collar up, out

in space now walking and with each step,

the ground sinks a little further...

sinks a little...

sinks...

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raypool

Thu 12th Jan 2017 19:38

Very bleak and to the point David. A story told in a flash; dare I say again I can sense the old STD phone box from the 80s and the rack of phone books. The claustrophobia of a phone box is a perfect setting. Something we have lost in mobile phones. "Rusted ribcage of totalled phonebox" makes it for me.

Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 12th Jan 2017 17:04

Very effective.

The photo looks like a gaping maw. Sure works well with your poem.

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