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unreachable

silent spoken sounds land

soft and spread still shock

 

into fallen detritus

and pre-disturbed ground

 

voices afraid to speak

run deep but reach slow up through

their graveyard of skeleton shadows...

◄ when I was young..

my old school ►

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elPintor

Wed 9th Nov 2016 01:44

Hey Suki and Stu..I thank you much, sirs!

elP

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suki spangles

Tue 8th Nov 2016 10:45

Yes, silence speaks volumes; the present absence..

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Stu Buck

Tue 8th Nov 2016 03:51

really enjoyed this, its very atmospheric and the first verse especially is ethereal

elPintor

Mon 7th Nov 2016 21:45

Hey there, David and Ray,

I should tell you, Ray, that I'm profoundly uneducated when it comes to poetry. I used to read Poe as a teenager because I appreciated the macabre and because stories like "The Premature Burial" demanded little of a short attention span. Though, over the past several years, I've listened to some readings by Dylan Thomas and Pablo Neruda, and have to say that I find immense beauty in Neruda's work..sometimes, I wish I could think and express with such unfettered eloquence.

I can do incoherent, David..that's probably my gig according to most so I really appreciate comments. However, what you say does make sense. I was thinking last evening just along those lines--that some thoughts are better put to rest. I would say that you can't make anyone understand anything for which they aren't already prepared to perceive. And, besides, some can make fodder of the most profound experiences in such a way that you'd wish you'd never even tried.

Thanks to the both of you..I appreciate the opportunity for interchange immensely.

elP

ps
I thought of this song while reading your comments at work today. I could never appreciate this song when I was young the way I'm able to now..

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9P202C3mm8g

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raypool

Mon 7th Nov 2016 16:07

A variation of Gray's Elegy elP. Just joking. This is really effective and as always leaves us hunting for definitions which are there to be teased out. David makes an eloquent effort to do that. There should be a sign saying:" please do not disturb."

Ray

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