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November hymn : a song without notes

"Looks like its hot for good."  said the obligated and fatherly weatherman, tucked beneath my arm.

Cold mornings and cold nights bare the apropriate signiature of a month with so much "Im sure." attatched to it.

Hot mid days strangled by the seatbelt-jacket paradox seem to find a way to discomfort the driver until he wrestles the sweat off without clogging up the 5.

Post work parking spot stretches get beaten by the wind of deserts what still garrison the force of typical and violent fluctuations in temperature.

But its all funky in a Toys R Us parkinglot in Burbank.

"When I was a kid November was cold AF" I say to a breeze, warm and cold all at once.

"This is some Vegas shit." I feel, quantifying my steadfast beleif in something so big and ancient I have no place placing myself as a stantion between it.

So I shut my eyes and walked toward the truck.

Prentend Im in Veas.

Where wind like this is suposed to be.

Where the artifice of civilization dosnt trick the occupant into thinking the natural occourances surrounding it owe anything to the staccato C7 somehow ringing out in his or her memory as if the artifice itself were some perminant and imovable object,

But rather a place where time and experiance share some stupid, embarrasing, and unexpected chuckle in they key of "Everything is changing."

While the conductor waves his batton , holding still.

◄ Tell the Whistling Cowboy to Stop

Comments

<Deleted User> (13762)

Thu 17th Nov 2016 20:11

hey Corr - you're always welcome to send some of your unwanted fan girls my way ha ha - but I understand what you're saying - when I get chance I'll take a look and let you know but right now I'm in catch up mode and definitely chasing my own tail - and my own words - seemingly on the back boiler whilst humdrums and day to days eat away my hours.

just keep it real - it's what you do best.

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Corr Lens

Thu 17th Nov 2016 10:16

thanks colin! been dormant based on the fact I've gotten more praise than constructive criticism, fan girls are fun but i want to improve my shit. If you have some time look through my stuff and let me know what you think i can improve upon. Thanks so much for reading it means a lot

<Deleted User> (13762)

Sun 6th Nov 2016 09:47

good to see you back Corr with your intriguing take on life - some great lines and imagery here to enjoy - I'm not going to analyse any of it - but just to say that Vegas hot air shit blowing across the desert is way more preferable than the Arctic blast coming our way in the UK right now. Waft us some more of your words sooner rather than later pal.

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