THE STORM

During the night the storm erupted

and the thunderous applause of the rain

welcomed it and the dance

keeping us hostage

under the cabin roof

my subterranean sleep disrupted.

 

When the power went down

the night became a sightless eye

but the sound was of a sky in torment

and we were afloat, unblinking then

 

in the coracle of a disturbed dream

buffeted as in between banks in a river

of tall trees, whose shimmer was a dance

and I lit small candles and looked around

inside the bowl at once profound

 

as the cathedrals arose

and rang to some monstrous organ of light

while the storm erupted in the dead of night.

◄ SOMETHING FOR THE WEEKEND

VINYL FRONTIER ►

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raypool

Sun 18th Sep 2016 22:25

Thanks all you lovely readers for taking this on board.
It was an intense experience and quite scary when the power went off, but candles added to the hairiness of it.

regards to Stu, David, Colin, Dominic and Martin.

Ray

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Martin Elder

Sun 18th Sep 2016 21:43

This is simply a superb piece of poetry Ray, Have to agree with the others coracle is a beautiful word to use. in fact the whole line is great
'in the coracle of a disturbed dream'
marvellous

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Dominic James

Sun 18th Sep 2016 09:22

This is great stuff Ray, the storm really strikes from the first thunderous applause to the upset dream-scales of bowl and cathedral.

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Sat 17th Sep 2016 23:53

Yes I'm with David and Stu, the coracle line is a hit. And they always look impossible to manoeuvre except on the stillest of waters by the most skillest of Welsh persons. No more storms please - I'm coming home on Thursday.

Looking forward to reading your 'more poems' Ray.

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raypool

Sat 17th Sep 2016 23:32

I was just thinking David, that without the C letter coracle becomes oracle and without the other C a substitution could be made of "orrible" , which in fact the storm was on a basic level. Thanks for your lovely comments - just the thing when the holiday is over! More poems to come my friend.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Sat 17th Sep 2016 20:59

POTW!

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Stu Buck

Sat 17th Sep 2016 20:59

quite, quite excellent. kudos for coracle as well. a fine word. in fact, all of it is brilliant. i was just about to highlight my favourite line until i realised its every one of them.

POTW! POTW!

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