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Silk Worm

Those river banks were known to me
But, so full of youthful joy was I
That I longed for love and in the gloom
Your exotic beauty caught my eye
 
Dazzled by your salesman's pitch
Your merry jive and empty talk
I followed you, and how you led
Elan and aplomb in your dashing walk
 
The days were filled with pleasant trade
We brought lively banter to a weary road
A perfect team, all were agreed
Business was good, laughter flowed
 
Our future seemed to gleam ahead
As soft silk sheens with expensive hue
We were lost together, but I was found
You knew I'd fallen in love with you
 
Then a sudden chill came through your eyes
And you left me here in greying strife
Far from home, with no-one to love
Never to be a silk lad's wife
 
 
Written after using this piece as a suggested prompt (a Chinese poem written in 718BC):
 

Prompt

◄ A Garden Party

Sweet Little Lies ►

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steve pottinger

Wed 29th Jun 2016 14:21

I do enjoy reading a modern take on an ancient poem. Nice work, David!

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 28th Jun 2016 16:05

David,
Nice updating of an ancient one.

I see now the reason for the (silken?) `exotic` in the first stanza)

And how the L`s in the two syllabled `elan` and `aplomb`
speed the rhyming up to fit.



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