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SURROGATE MOTHER

The baby buggy was pushed up to a table

there the woman supported a knitted doll

sat with empty feeding bottle to hand

patiently waiting

for the bottle to never drain

attendant on immaterial needs

the imagined spillage carefully wiped away.

 

Other dolls waited patiently

a family, a brood

of wool and glassy eyes

waiting in a woolly world

with never the wit to realize

that theirs was a mother of sorts

feeding the dream of last resorts.

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raypool

Thu 23rd Jun 2016 20:54

Thanks so much Stu and David. Always nice to get your considered input. I saw the American doc. about gorilla intelligence. Quite mindboggling .

I got off on the wool and the eyes, David you know how it is. Something about those wide eyes that have inspired much of horror on film. This lady is quite beyond the pail and sadly no one talks to her apart from when they serve her in cafes.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Wed 22nd Jun 2016 22:32

brilliant ray. i watched this documentary a few years ago about people adopting monkeys as babies because they couldnt have kids. heartbreaking. such a great last two lines as well. especially like 'glassy eyes', sums the whole thing up and gives it a further, distant darkness.

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