zipped at my rib..
i spoke then
flinched again.
this utterance,
a guttural sound,
sprang forth
finding itself an
unsettled ground.
It knew me not
yet fervored flimsily;
and I, a floating seahorse,
behind its darkened sight.
have to agree with previous comments. great short piece and open to several interpretations. super.
Lynn Hamilton
Fri 6th May 2016 12:33
Enjoyed reading and making my own interpretation. Especially like the middle verse.
Lynn
Really like this short piece elPintor!
(is that a typo in line 6 an/on etc?)
Keep posting! Well done.
Graham
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elPintor
Fri 6th May 2016 23:27
Would it mean something different if it were a typo?
The words were chosen specifically to encourage individual interpretation..glad to see that they were effective..thanks to all, for reading and commenting.
elPintor