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bristol temple meads to manchester piccadilly

when i travel
on a train
i feel the movement
as a fuzz
on the pressured parts
of my body
that sit apart
from eyes
lost in the mix
of town
and countryside

the fuzz
like a bearded coat
combs and tails me
moves on
as one with me
and when the train stops
i think on
how bold
a stationary moment
can feel
in this
last wait
before
home

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 24th Jul 2009 19:46

This is really good, Emily. You have an great flair for words and phrasing of very original ideas. I look for more. If you don't see a comment from me on a poem, ask me about it, for I probably will have only overlooked it.

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winston plowes

Mon 20th Jul 2009 22:25

Hi Emily, Liked this one. Bristol to Man Picc is a regular journey I make. love the fuzz on the pressured parts and the end especially. the boldness of the stationary moment is brilliant. Rhyme of bold and moment and use of station-ary. Winston

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