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Just be

Gazing from his window

at the neighbour's two children

filling the garden with bubbles

he is looking idly, listening

to their chatter and laughter

both loving what they are doing , both

active

while he is idle


off work

on the sick

inactive

passing time


the boy is busy with his bubbles

they fill the garden with proud, glistening gold

achievement

the girl blows few, and

watches them

intently

Sometimes she stops and watches his.

She stops

Completely


His life is on hold

he is in limbo, this busy man,

chained by chance to this room

this desk, this paralysis, this deep deep

impotent frustration


The neighbour's dog bounds through

careless, one thought only hunger

the bubble tubs fly

the children do not cry

though the boy follows the dog

complaining


The girl studies the spreading liquid

from many angles.

She plays patterns with the soap

which soon soaks away

as the last bubble drifts past the man's window

and bursts


The girl sits and looks at the sky, the clouds,

the birds, she studies a

grasshopper, while

the boy can be heard crying now


The man looks at her and thinks

O God can I be like that?

He says it out loud

Oh God can I be like that?”


All I've done, the meetings, the papers, the

money

the places, the people, the

bubbles,

the bubbles I have blown.

Can I let them go?
Can I just trace the patterns?
Can I be like her?

Can I just be?

just be

be

◄ The rains have not come

Nothing ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 18th Jul 2009 17:34

I really admire your parallel thinking. Does personal symbolism ever become too pervasive? Not crazy about the formatting, but that's just me...two people could discuss forever and never agree.

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Francine

Sat 18th Jul 2009 17:13

Love this Dave...
I totally agree with Isobel and Peter...

Very well written!
I often love to 'Just be' : )

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Isobel

Sat 18th Jul 2009 12:20

A brilliant poem Dave - so wasted on me and the Blue Boar last night - it has to be read and reflected on. You capture the meaninglessnes of what went on before so well - the importance is now - this moment and the next and being able to take that step...How many of us will be able to relate to that.
Isobel x

Pete Crompton

Sat 18th Jul 2009 12:08

there is a strong element of time and self reflection in this poem. time and the new generation. I really like the very slight uneasiness, the way it sits along side the innocence of the children. I read this and saw very clear and defined imagery, I like ti when a poem does that. There is a sadness and frustration, tension that I can relate to.

Really identified with this, enjoyed!

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