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A Place Like a Poem

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My place has leaves and mold, 

cracked paint, stale wood and curtains that sway.

As dawn brings a new day, my place hums with prayers,

smells of incense, and looks like sunshine.

My place has cherry floors, upon which when I place my cheek, a chilly warmth spreads through my body.

My place is rickety-rackety with family - 

the laughs of my grandma

the corny jokes of my grandpa

the yip-yap of my mother and

the memory of my father.

My place smells of spices : dried red chilli, Koriander, sesame seeds, cardamom, and cinnamon.

My place reminds me of the bad times when my mother's coughs echoed the walls, her pain carried through the wind. 

My place looks like heaven, feels like home and mutters whipsers of comfort.

The little boys playing cricket outside, my grandma cooking in the kitchen, and my uncle watching ESPN in the living room.

My place is bits and pieces, fragments of my memory that I hold in the palm of my hand.

My place is no longer mine to call it mine.

My place is where I grew up on the porch, took a bath amongst the grass, and cried against the fence.

My place is peace, and piece by piece it disappears.

Five years from now, it shall vanish from the library of within; as time goes by, and life moves on.

◄ Nameless

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Laura Taylor

Wed 3rd Feb 2016 12:11

It really is full of riches, as Greg says. This has to be one of THE most evocative poems I've ever read. It has actual texture, smell, and sound, combined with the wisdom of 'all things shall pass'.

This line "it shall vanish from the library of within" makes me ache it's that poetic.

Fantastic, you should be very proud and happy with this poem. From one poet to another, I pay you this compliment: I wish I had written it :)

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Greg Freeman

Wed 3rd Feb 2016 10:22

This is a poem full of riches. I love "rickety-rackety with family", and the way the lines conjure up so many pictures.

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Stu Buck

Wed 3rd Feb 2016 08:58

agreed. this is gorgeous. i love spices in poetry, they are wonderfully evocative.

on line 14 'bpoys' should be 'boys'.

i'm there with you, in your place and in the emotions you transfer through the page. brilliant stuff, the first poem ive read today and a fine way to start!

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Jim Trott

Wed 3rd Feb 2016 06:11

Hi Chandana

This is a beautiful poem which I really enjoyed. I could almost smell the incense and spices.

I love the reflective sadness, and was shaken by the almost casual acceptance that the cherished memories will fade.

Lovely, lovely poem.

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