THE MUSE

that courting couple in their convolution

sweet illusion and self delusion

go hand in hand

down a scented aisle

in a marriage of sweet infusion

 

such that only the initiate

can render clear their true intention

so

when the muse is strong

kiss and make up

you twins

to avert the twists

and turns

of confusion

◄ THE DEATH OF SWEETS

THE WARREN HOUSE INN DARTMOOR ►

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raypool

Sat 9th Jan 2016 19:19

Thanks Vicky and Stu. So glad you liked this - as usual I sweated over it and tried to make it a bit romantic!

Appreciate your comments.


Ray

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Vicki Ayers

Sat 9th Jan 2016 12:00

Wow! I love this can't really add anything more to what Stu said - it's perfect!

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Stu Buck

Sat 9th Jan 2016 11:57

i love this ray. the first two lines are so sweetly sung, and the structure is brilliant. then 'go hand in hand down a scented aisle in a marriage of sweet infusion' is just excellent. a really killer three lines to end the first verse. the tapering of the final verse sits well with its 'twisting' subject matter. excellent.

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