THE MINE OF TRUTH
dirty and dark
hard to breathe
confused about time
feeling my way
suddenly a light the mother lode revealed at last crystals of truth I clawed them
My own discovery
the truth blinding
age behind me
the light stayed on.
Comments
Very much enjoyed. And an interesting format. Any reason why 'them' is not attached to its phrase? It then becomes a major line isolated in that way, but not, IMO, a major thought when separated from 'I clawed them'. A respectful question only.
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raypool
Wed 9th Dec 2015 20:23
Cheers David . I went with the three word format as its a discipline . When you are underground there is a sort of distress to look back so I felt that pressure there. Thanks for liking it.
Cynthia, thanks for comments. Regrettably, the format on the blog is different from the typed version which has centred text throughout and has that line I clawed them as one phrase... I'll have to check that in future!!
Well spotted. Ray