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“All our best men are laughed at in this nightmare land.” - Jack Kerouac

 

so many people living

their lives under such

burning white stars

with such wonder and

passion for unity and

need and will to give

and kiss and love for

all these people who

said yes to life and yes

to each other who did

nothing in fear and did

nothing with regret or

hate but instead truly

knew what it meant to

be human for each of

these people we have

a bullet and a barcode

and no room for such

endless joy inside peace

and such blinding vision

to take us over and see

truly for the first time.

were all doomed i tell you

◄ Les Bulot

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Stu Buck

Thu 5th Nov 2015 22:13

hi cynthia. these words just fell from my brain after reading rays poem/finishing the book 'on the road'. it took about 2 minutes to type it down and it was structured nicely because i was creating it as i was typing so i just made up the words in my head and pressed enter every time i felt a 'beat'.(does that make sense?).
one of my quick ones this. glad you enjoyed it!

ray - mr pirsig! i read it a long time ago but have a copy on my bookshelf. i may revisit!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 5th Nov 2015 19:52

I also enjoyed this work. Did these lines actually fall so evenly on the page the first time round, or did they require some jockeying about? Isn't it marvellous how reading another poet's works can be stimulating, a if a button has been pressed.

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raypool

Thu 5th Nov 2015 19:40

I'll check out the book at some near date Stu. Talking of "road" books, one of my favourites was "Zen and the art of motorcycle maintenance" a classic of the 70s. Can't remember the author.
I'm putting a long long poem on tonight and that uses a similar idea to the "rolling" style ( I think). ! Ray

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Stu Buck

Thu 5th Nov 2015 15:32

thanks ray! i am favouring the style at the moment. gives the whole thing a tumbling effect which then gives real power to the final lines. i have just finished reading 'on the road' by jack kerouac which i can recommend whole heartedly as a fine piece of work and one i feel i should have read earlier. its full of wonderful, tumbling prose about love, life and jazz sandwiched between a riveting travel document. brilliant stuff.

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raypool

Thu 5th Nov 2015 15:26

A fine piece of work, Stu. More poetic than mine and a corruption of beauty to reveal the dark underbelly - I can't help seeing the burning torch often carried by the religiously inspired in here. I like the rolling motion of the lines with no punctuation; lots of momentum.
and thanks for the compliment - what more can anyone ask ? Ray.

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