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Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen

 

Masked and passive,

just the drawing of a breath

across her threshold;

 

she is home in a cage

for a bed, bars prevent

any spillage or descent.

 

Her chest become a bellows;

body bidding it

to rise

and fall

and rise again,

summoning the will

to act in total independence

of an opiated mind.

 

We stand to one side

as the medical procession

passes by.

 

Collapse.

The King is on his knees;

terror re-configures strength

in eyes too scared to see

and hands that cannot bear to touch.

 

Buttons pressed,

re-connecting

‘you are Husband, you are Man’.

 

Cheeks wiped,

I take her hand in mine

and show him how to be.

 

 

 

◄ The Melting of the Ice - Prelude

Tableau 2: Night of Years ►

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Laura Taylor

Mon 24th Aug 2015 12:10

Hi Steve

Yeh, you got it. Thank you for reading and your kind words.

Steve Smith

Sun 23rd Aug 2015 20:53

This is a quietly visceral piece on the death of a loved one.
Measured, great phrases "terror re-configures strength"..
The first verse captures pain in its detachment.
Makes me feel sadness.
Steve Smith

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Aug 2015 09:39

Thank you ray - appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I thought this idea would either be totally up itself, or it would work. Your comment gives me hope :)

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raypool

Mon 17th Aug 2015 22:04

great imaginative work and such a good idea to work the mind to the grandeur of this particular music . I'll watch with interest! Ray

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Laura Taylor

Mon 17th Aug 2015 09:34

This is the second part of a series of five interconnecting poems. Recent events in my life were preceded by hearing Finlandia, by Jean Sibelius, on the radio, and it so completely described how I was feeling that it took me over, and informs the whole series.

As a big nod to Sibelius, I've decided to use a loosely-based symphonic structure, so the parts are laid out like this:

The Melting of the Ice

Movements:

1. Prelude
2. Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen
3. Tableau 2: Night of Years
4. Tableau 3: Tempest
5. Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice

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