ON THE HEATH

I caught you with your pants down

frost white from medieval winds

crackling underfoot, ice - glass reflecting

and from knobbled ponds face up

the calm unblinking sky.

Photographed at a distance

small lockets of cold.

Your infinitesimally small response

a desperate winter's cry.

Dogs were sniffing at your face

perplexed by your scentless shell,

with stunted trees your fringes girt

pointing fingers at the hem.

Then marauding gulls in a plague of white

descended as to Bethlehem.

 

◄ STRING QUARTET

KNOCK THREE TIMES ►

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 5th Jul 2015 22:21

Ray, I can't remember whether I've commented on your work before but this is real quality stuff.
One of my criteria when reading a piece is "would I have liked to have written this" definitely.

Excellent work

Graham

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Sun 5th Jul 2015 20:30

I was going to say just the same Greg but wasn't brave enough to admit I didn't quite understand. Thanks for stepping in first.

Great lines as always Ray.

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Greg Freeman

Sun 5th Jul 2015 20:27

I like this a lot, Ray, even though I'm not sure what it's about. Some arresting images in this poem, including "scentless shell" and "small lockets of cold". And the seagulls "in a plague of white".

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