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Vaccary Walls

Vaccary Walls

Stone lines veining the landscape

Quarried slabs pulled from the earth

Placed upright making a stone fence

Enclosing green fields for Cattle and Sheep

Dividing bog and tussock

Residual hedge trees find purchase for roots

Alongside the rough stones

Where the valley gives way to peat hag and Bilberry

A Buzzard overhead begins a shallow upward spiral

High above the black walls

He is spotted and quickly mobbed by Crows

Soaring and then dropping slowly circling

 Like water swirling round a hole

Moving off to the next valley

 

◄ Sunken Forests

Picking snails by moonlight ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Jun 2015 15:14

I had to come back to this work because I really like it, and just ran out of time before. The subject is superb.

May I suggest culling unimportant words that construct 'prose-like sentences'. You have strong, evocative words here, setting clear images. I would give them full force, impelling your 'scene' forward.

Do you know what I mean?

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