I caught her on a soft turn such that
the sun was moved to laughter,
and all that had life lightened
with the look I gave
and the beat that I felt.
Smooth was the flow of her hip
and fluid as a rhyme.
A flock of birds escorted her in a livening breeze.
No one will ever be safe from such moments
and the grace that I thought was lost.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 6th Jun 2015 20:30
I love the way you throw in a slightly off-kilter line - 'a flock of birds escorted her in a livening breeze' - an added depth and dimension. You've been busy and it's been a pleasure to read your posts Ray.
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raypool
Sat 6th Jun 2015 22:17
It's a pleasure to catch a few thoughts in the fishing line of opportunity, even if you end up with the rubbish....
That line about the birds does maybe add a surreal touch, a sort of cinematic liberty. Cheers for your comments.
Ray