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I'm not looking at the bloody business end
just talking for the sake of hope
and holding the squeezing hand
all emotion pushed deep down
                            or I'll drown

the spring light is bright upon the pimpled wall
as I slide light-headed to the floor
noting the dust on the skirting board
all emotion is pushed deep down
as I gasp for the air or be drowned

between the sucking squeezing sigh
that terrible silence that draws the eye
from this feinting self obsession to the red baby
dangling downwards - cry - oh cry -
                        please make a sound

and it comes - unreal in that morning in sobs
the burst'd lungs to breach the damn
as the pent up feelings of failure flow
                 gut freed in laughing grief

 

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jeremy young

Fri 22nd May 2015 18:15

thank you Lynn - though I prefer to call them mules rather than clogs

Lynn Hamilton

Fri 22nd May 2015 13:25

I love this. You are a clever clogs.

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jeremy young

Thu 21st May 2015 10:20

thank you travis - suggestion noted and change made

it's one of the problems when you get caught between two horses - free verse that begins as a sort of villanelle, half way through wants to be a sonnet - and then decides to be neither - words hang around

Travis Brow

Thu 21st May 2015 07:08

Bloody hell this is tense. One suggestion - ''as I gasp for the air or be drowned'' - Could the line not simply end in ''drown''? That said, i realise it's part of a refrain.

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