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widow

he's more real than when he was there
those wisps of his scent in the chair
the cold bed

the things that didn't need to be said
in the unspoken mirror of feelings
half the peelings

half the portion and all the bed
in sickness and in health you said
his chair

now moved for the sake of change
and the ornaments rearranged
he's more real

when you shut the door and call
'I'm home' at that blank wall
within you

and without you as you face the world
the sense of strength and the aching ball
of grief

is more real now he has gone
as you escape to his side
of the bed

 

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 30th Apr 2015 12:19

Jeremy,
congratulations on an excellent and feeling poem.

(and also on your spot on handling of your rhyme scheme)

A Pleasure to read.

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Thu 30th Apr 2015 12:02

even WOW! wouldn't be sufficient enough to praise this fantastic poem.Great piece Jeremy.x

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Thu 30th Apr 2015 10:05

we are blown away.xx

Travis Brow

Thu 30th Apr 2015 06:46

''half the peelings / half the portion and all the bed'' - Jeremy, you're a master phraser. A lovely piece.

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