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What if this is all real?

Stumbling with great form,

As ready and stable as any other hungover,

Willfully sick step could be,

I caught a terrifying question 

Posed to no one.

"What if this is all real?"

He was a toothless mess,

Wishing he could feel as bad as me.

Longing for the self defeating luxury of excess,

And stuck with piss stained slacks,

Feeling the true bad I thought I was complaining about.

I get to wreck my body,

Wreck my head.

I more or less play by the rules and am thusly granted

The right to explore the notion that what we stumble around in,

And on,

Is some sarcastic illusion.

Comfort in this sleepless bed of imperminance

Has left me feeling the world I'm supposedly surrounded by

Is up to interpretation. 

But what if this is all real?

What am I supposed to do then?

When it's been a game for so long?

When it's been a beautiful riddle with no end?

When it's been so fleeting,

Consequence has been up to interpretation ?

What if this is all real?

 

 

 

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 19th Apr 2015 22:12

Corr,
this seems to me to be one of those poems which wonders around in the land of no-whereness, no-whyness
or no-whoness, but never seems to ask itself why we should expect a where, a why, or a who.

After all, if that`s the situation - what are we worried about?

It seems too easy to just state the situation without some
enquiry as to why it is thus.

After the foregoing that last line doesn`t read real.

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Corr Lens

Sun 19th Apr 2015 18:17

@preeti @lynn thanks so much!!! @cynthia you're right on all fronts , hard

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 19th Apr 2015 15:24

A difficult topic to engage, but you have strong pertinent ideas, honestly, forcefully and 'artistically' presented. We all have to face our idiocies sooner or later.

Check 'impermanence'. Even this may not be correct; but it's probably closer.

Checked your Bio, and you're not 'sorry' at all. Who are you kidding? I look forward to more of your work.

Lynn Hamilton

Sun 19th Apr 2015 14:43

Really enjoyed reading this Mr Lens

Preeti Sinha

Sun 19th Apr 2015 14:42

You are a pleasure to read.

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Corr Lens

Sun 19th Apr 2015 12:25

Thanks for reading!! Checked it out and it's def in the same vein

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