.
eating cakes in coffee shops
this is not
cicero
or yates
or the turn
down the open mic
glottalstopped
or frightened
this is not
drifting into rap
this is not
eating cakes in coffee shops
this is not
red bricked boredom
in provincial northern towns
nor
back stitched
scissor cut
dressing
this is not
shadows in shade
eating cakes in coffee shops
this is not
why should it
for to see
and to hear
will not bring on the spring
only rain
can bring
this is not
why should it
eating cakes in coffee shops
Laura Taylor
Fri 13th Mar 2015 09:38
I really enjoyed reading this up until that last stanza. It kind of brought me up short. There seem to be words missing, blanks, absences. I'm not sure if that is the intended effect on the reader? It's the 'why should it' line that jars the most.