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Dave's Bird

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She seemed to hold the weight

of a hummingbird

and had the flutter

of an owl in her eyes.


Carrying fragile arms

like sparrow wings,

she reached out

and touched my lips.


She told me,

not with a squawk

but in a whisper,

that the Devil


is an optimist

if he thinks

he can make people

worse than they are.



◄ The Importance Of Magic In The Void

What Salvador Dali Said One Time ►

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Steve Regan

Wed 13th May 2009 18:24

Strange, spare, unnerving, theologically creative. I like this a lot.

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Francine

Tue 12th May 2009 22:07

Nice as it is a bit elusive... and I like that she alludes to the fact that not everything is what it seems...

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Gus Jonsson

Tue 12th May 2009 21:55

John... This right up my street ...love the very pants off it... superbo!

Gus

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Noetic-fret!

Tue 12th May 2009 20:57

Fantastic, it is short yet descriptive in so many ways, and the end, a poingnancy that is subtle yet clear and bright. Nice one John.

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winston plowes

Tue 12th May 2009 18:03

The 1st stanza getts your attension and the last leavesyou with a message. complete

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winston plowes

Tue 12th May 2009 18:02

Strange and interesting this one John, liked it. 1st stanza especially. Didn't expect the end either. A compact poem this. Win

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