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As the nation sleeps

It's my time of day,

In these hours within the

Night i walk the Lonely

Streets lit by the Incandescence

Of the Modern Architects

New forest. As I walk,

The chill of the twenty-first

Century touching my

Brutalised soul, I see

For every light a

Dulled soul awaiting death,

Their innocense radiated,

Then extinguished.

My solemn journey -

Footsteps on carpets

Of unyielding solidity

Take me past the centres

Of wealth and there,

The brightest perhaps

A prison for thousands -

Millions of souls I wonder;

What price freedom

In this brand new age?

◄ I Play

The Puzzle ►

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<Deleted User>

Mon 20th Apr 2009 09:54

Really like this one, Mike.



Do u mean:

Of the Modern Architects(architects')?

New forest. As I walk,




and do you really need the ? at the end?

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Francine

Fri 17th Apr 2009 14:11

This is beautifully written with sensitivity to the feelings of frustration of many...

<Deleted User> (5646)

Fri 17th Apr 2009 11:37

What price freedom indeed!

Your poem encapsulates the need for equilibrium. Significant of the equinox which ideally would be all year round for the economy.

Very thought provoking and so much depth, like Pete i think it's quite haunting.

Janet.x

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Steve Regan

Fri 17th Apr 2009 10:59

A classic poem of alienation..." I see for every light a dulled soul awaiting death" ... powerful imagery. And there is hope in the piece too, with the fleeting reference to freedom. The best poetry is serious about the human condition, and I like this very much, Mike.

Pete Crompton

Fri 17th Apr 2009 08:46

"The chill of the twenty-first

Century"

Hi Mike, like the idea of the21st century chill
I always feel the haunting in your work, I enjoy that.

You could sell pain sometimes.

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Noetic-fret!

Fri 17th Apr 2009 07:01

There is a tippin of hat to Ben Okri within this poem. I'm quite a fan of his work and for those who are inquisitive, An African Ellergy is quite a treat and worth purchasing.

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