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Mother ! Can you see me ?

( This was a situation 16 years ago when my wife was expecting our youngest child. Unfortunately she had a fall  which put her into labour and our son was born 6 weeks premature and spent 4 weeks in intensive care. It was touch and go for both of them at the time but they came through it. Our son has now grown into a strapping 6 foot athletic, bright young man after such a traumatic entrance to life. )

 

Can you hear me, hear me?

Splishing, sploshing, splashing,

Making waves,

In my cosy warm bubble.

 

Can you feel me?

Wriggling, twisting, turning,

Tickling your ribs with a finger or toe.

But not the elbow; no, I won't give you the elbow !

 

I can hear you, hear you,

Talking, laughing, louder and louder,

Joking, sneezing, sighing,

Yawning, tiring, tiring.

 

I can feel you,

Walking, slipping, tripping, falling and rolling.

Sharp pains, stinging, gripping,

Knotting, grabbing and controlling.

 

Blue lights, bumpy ride, paramedics astride.

Fixing tubes, checking time,

Listening, discussing,

Pulse rates, heart beats, gas and air.

 

I'm not ready, not ready yet.

The pressure's building, building.

Can you hear me mother ?

I'm fighting, fighting but fading, fading.

 

You're stressing, fluids draining,

Eyes closing, head spinning, body fainting.

Surgeons moving quicker and quicker,

Cutting it fine, just in time.

 

But the clock's still ticking.

For seven minutes still ticking.

Not breathing, not moving,

Flatline sticking.

 

Then a twitch, a gasp, a yell, crying, crying.

I've made it, made it !

Can you see me mother?

I've made it !

◄ EYES AT THE SCENE

CUT AND PASTE THE MILLSTONE INTO A TIME MACHINE ►

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Ged the Poet

Wed 4th Jun 2014 19:27

New to WOL and just discovered this. I could feel my own heart begin to race along the further I read. Delightful Poem. Wonderful outcome Mike.

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 6th Feb 2013 12:24

Great perspective. Excellent title. Enjoyed. I almost felt broody again.

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Wed 6th Feb 2013 12:10

The poem is born - and such a fine specimen it is - interesting point of view - ta muchly, Nick.

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