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HAPPIEST ON HER BACK

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my mother was a slut

 

who liked cute babies

and went on marches

to ban the bomb

 

her own mother

named her so

for leading men on

with her ration book stockings

and sooty eyes

 

I knew her

as a gentle woman

who never looked her father in the eye

nor my father

though she wasn't shy

 

we drew on the walls

and bed sheets that hung on the line

trusting

that she wouldn't mind

and she didn't

as she worked on her taggy nails

 

my mother was a slut

her mother said

but

she liked me

and my sister

but most of all

she loved holidays

and men

◄ TEA DANCE

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Gareth Writer-Davies

Sat 6th Oct 2012 17:35

Thanks for all the comments. I did toy with making the opening line the title, but then I may have lost the shock value; I think the title is OK, but I struggled to find a better one. The poem was well received at a recent gig : )

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Isobel

Thu 27th Sep 2012 19:53

I hate the title but like the poem.

It sounds like this woman had plenty of admirable traits and it's what the kids think that is the legacy :)

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th Sep 2012 13:53

She sounds wonderful! (Love the photo too.)

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Anthony Emmerson

Wed 26th Sep 2012 12:45

Hi Gareth,

I think this has the strongest opening line I've ever read in any poem - guaranteed to make one want to read on! In fact, I think it makes for a better title than the one you've chosen. It hurts to read some of this - and so it should.

Regards,
A.E.

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