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Fishing For Fella's

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Fishing for Fella's



Scope out the field,
locate your target,
make your move
on a true bargain.

Set out the bait,
irresistible flesh;
the walking wriggle
for victim's interst.

Cast out the line,
straight to the point;
with charming smile,
in seductive voice.

Grow the pole, out
on the pull,
must be a big'un
down below.

Reel him in,
close and tight;
Destiny's dance,
romance at last!

Now you've got him,
hook, line and sinker;
in the back of the net,
emerge the victor.

◄ BREAK-DOWN a BREAK-UP

A Variant of a SESTINA poem: Little Child Lost. ►

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Phillip Kelly

Tue 8th Jul 2014 23:31

LOL. THANKS FOR COMPLIMENTS CANDICE REINEKE...much appreciated. and the idea was a too generalise all guys perceptions...but actually was just my inner thoughts and fantasy ..because im quite a withdrawn, shy type of guy...not type of guy to be confident in making a move on a lady in public....so just kinda my inner fantasy and wish...to have a lady at pub come up to me and flirt and be domnant and confident one and tell me ... "" you are taking me out to dinner this weekend. ""

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Candice Reineke

Tue 8th Jul 2014 16:22

Haha this is great :) Seems like the woman is doing ALL of the work for "romance at last!". Is this how "fellas" expect and/or prefer women to act? Or has this just been your experience?

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Sun 22nd Apr 2012 10:51

I hear the writer's voice as a man with bitter experience. Right down to the feeling of anger at a woman's shallowness. I like it, the feeling that it's a wrangle and there's a winner at the end which the poem implies is always the woman. I'd love to write a woman's response to this!

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Sat 21st Apr 2012 03:15

written from the hunter's viewpoint. short, punchy phrasing gives it a sense of urgency. a good pace, scoping for the spoils of flesh, no less. a good read, ta muchly, Nick.

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 21st Apr 2012 03:11

I love the title and you've done it justice.
The style is a little bit brittle - many monosyllabic words - and this give the impression that the speaker is enumerating these instructions from a masculine point of view (not that I'm suggesting you try to think like a woman )
a sardonic observation of women's wiles and very enjoyable ( esp double entendre in verse 4) xx

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