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Chrysalis

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Chrysalis 

Water

 Throat

 Heart

 Root

 

I am surprised to hear my voice

so bold and sure of it’s self

as if it weren’t my own

 

and for a second there

I have to wonder.

 

I listen again,

 

There is a distant sound

of harmony and balance,

they are bleeding together

the masculine with the feminine

 

It is a song

A chant

 

It is spilling out over my lips

 

But I do not sing?

I never chant?

 

Water

 Throat

 Heart

 Root

 

Again, I am surprised by my voice,

as if I’d never heard it before

 

Like a child learning to speak

I am trying out vowels

Tasting consonants

Curling my tongue

Swaying my words

and cooing till song appears

 

It is dripping like water from my throat

My heart

My root

 

I am rolling out my wings

Moving decisively forward

Spontaneous and fully aware

 

I am full of compassion

Ready to except any change in situation

 

I am

I'm singing

I am aligning my heart with my throat

 

Bold sounds are falling from my teeth

My body is strengthening

My blood moving

I am linking arms

Hugging in my shoulders

till there are no more lines to blend

 

Water

 Throat

 Heart

 Root

 

I will kiss them all

Lick there tears

There salt my sustenance

Until all that is left is

clear communication

A complete transformation

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Barbi Touron

Fri 23rd Mar 2012 20:15

Glen, thank you so much for your feedback. You are quite brave to enter the world of performance. I imagine it will be quite liberating and you will get more and more comfortable up there. I knew nothing about flash fiction, so I Wikipediaed it. Thanks for the introduction. I do tend to to go on, you should here me talk. Best wishes and good luck, I'm sure you'll be brilliant! Cheers

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Glyn Pope

Fri 23rd Mar 2012 18:44

I really like this. I looked at it and thought you could edit it more so there were less words; it borders on being flash fiction. But then I changed my mind. Don't alter a thing. Great stuff. I have to do a reading in September. My first. I am already terrified. I have real stage fright. But did you know that Charlie Watts of the Rolling Stones suffers dreadfully from stage fright. Can you believe that, drummer of one of the greatest bands in the world? So we're up with the best BT.
Best wishes Glyn

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Laura Taylor

Fri 23rd Mar 2012 13:38

Bold sounds are falling from my teeth - fabulous line that

I like your emphasis on the four aspects there

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Barbi Touron

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 17:22

Thank you both for the kind words, I have never preformed any of my writing. I have a touch of stage fright. Maybe I'll work up to it. Best wishes.

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Barbi Touron

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 17:20

Nick, Thank you for your good advice, def. not annoyed at all. I really appreciate your help. I try and try, but spelling and I are just not as good of friends as I would like to be. So I think from now on F7 will be my new best friend. Ciao

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 22nd Mar 2012 15:36

This is beautiful. The pace of the piece is brimming with excitement, inviting me in - kind of reading with a wide eyed smile, watching the transformation.

I would like to hear this performed also. Good stuff!

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Wed 21st Mar 2012 23:40

Would definitely respond to being performed. Please don't be annoyed but your spelling is original. F7 is a spell checker. Chow for now, Nick.

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